This is a real business letter that I found on a writing help website with real business letter to look at. It is a confirmation follow up after a business meeting. It includes a break down on the previous meeting on what what discussed in bullet form. It then gives a short and simple recap of the previously talked about schedule for future meeting along with how and who will conduct them. This business letter doesn't include anything that is unnecessary but only important information. It was well written and if I had to write it i would not change anything about it but only hope I could write it in a way as good as this.
Tuesday, September 6, 2011
This Insurance email is an ineffective style of communication for numerous reasons. One thing that stuck out to me was the over user of the word "via." Using various terms with the same meaning would have sounded better. Also, I felt as if they could have used smaller words as well as more familiar words. For example they use the word "liaise." Obviously I am not part of the intended audience but I don't think it is a commonly used word. Over all I think the communicator could have used smaller and more concrete wording.